Comments

• I'm not satisfied with the flow. I'd accept slight changes in meter but over 3 beats jars me quite. But the rhymes were nice and the message too. I say, work on that meter.

  in How is my poem so far? Comment by yesu-ben June 2021
• I'm not satisfied with the flow. I'd accept slight changes in meter but over 3 beats jars me quite. But the rhymes were nice and the message too. I say, work on that meter.

  in How is my poem so far? Comment by yesu-ben June 2021
• Beautiful. Classic. Tender. Technically superb.

  in Is this a poem? "Lunar Rhapsody" c/c? Comment by yesu-ben June 2021
• Beautiful. Classic. Tender. Technically superb.

  in Is this a poem? "Lunar Rhapsody" c/c? Comment by yesu-ben May 2021
• I'm not satisfied with the flow. I'd accept slight changes in meter but over 3 beats jars me quite. But the rhymes were nice and the message too. I say, work on that meter.

  in How is my poem so far? Comment by yesu-ben May 2021