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(Putting paragraph breaks will probably get you more reads. :) ) I think the idea of fairies who are kind of modern - with modern medicine techniques and terminology - is rather cool. This short passage made me curious how Aphrodite (the goddess…
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(Putting paragraph breaks will probably get you more reads. :) ) I think the idea of fairies who are kind of modern - with modern medicine techniques and terminology - is rather cool. This short passage made me curious how Aphrodite (the goddess…
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It's definitely a romantic scene, but the paragraph has some problems. You start too many sentences with the word, "I." I smiled, I heard him chuckle, I kissed again on his lips, I felt water on my head. Try to change things around a …
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It's definitely a romantic scene, but the paragraph has some problems. You start too many sentences with the word, "I." I smiled, I heard him chuckle, I kissed again on his lips, I felt water on my head. Try to change things around a …
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It's definitely a romantic scene, but the paragraph has some problems. You start too many sentences with the word, "I." I smiled, I heard him chuckle, I kissed again on his lips, I felt water on my head. Try to change things around a …
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It's definitely a romantic scene, but the paragraph has some problems. You start too many sentences with the word, "I." I smiled, I heard him chuckle, I kissed again on his lips, I felt water on my head. Try to change things around a …
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(Putting paragraph breaks will probably get you more reads. :) ) I think the idea of fairies who are kind of modern - with modern medicine techniques and terminology - is rather cool. This short passage made me curious how Aphrodite (the goddess…