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• 1st sentence: don't need "yet" i.e., "not common but skillful" 2nd sentence: try: "my father's job was the main source of our family's income", more professional sounding. 3rd sentence: don't start with "and&…

  in a personal narrative essay, is this a good paragraph? feel free to add sentences!!!!? Comment by yasmine-green_60bcf403100ee June 2021