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• Strong 2nd and 3rd stanzas. I would work on deleting some unneeded 'filler' words and trying to even out the line lengths to improve flow more. I do understand what you are saying in the last two stanzas but to me they were not as strong as they cou…

  in My poem called Transparency? Comment by tyler-young_609ff0f3321c0 May 2021