lily-roberts_609ff78335508
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Strong 2nd and 3rd stanzas. I would work on deleting some unneeded 'filler' words and trying to even out the line lengths to improve flow more. I do understand what you are saying in the last two stanzas but to me they were not as strong as they cou…