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  • I don't feel it. It's too much "this happens, that happens". Get into describing the setting more to get some more feeling in the paragraph. Get rid of "Could it get any more romantic?" and think of something clever.
    in Is this a good paragraph? Comment by ironlynxx May 2021
  • I don't feel it. It's too much "this happens, that happens". Get into describing the setting more to get some more feeling in the paragraph. Get rid of "Could it get any more romantic?" and think of something clever.
    in Is this a good paragraph? Comment by ironlynxx May 2021
  • I don't feel it. It's too much "this happens, that happens". Get into describing the setting more to get some more feeling in the paragraph. Get rid of "Could it get any more romantic?" and think of something clever.
    in Is this a good paragraph? Comment by ironlynxx May 2021
  • I don't feel it. It's too much "this happens, that happens". Get into describing the setting more to get some more feeling in the paragraph. Get rid of "Could it get any more romantic?" and think of something clever.
    in Is this a good paragraph? Comment by ironlynxx May 2021