Native English speaker : Correct grammar mistakes please?

chrischris
in Society & Culture

I'm from Germany and would like to write a letter in English without any grammatical mistakes so it would be a great help if you could correct the mistakes.

The letter is here :

" Dear Michael,

Thank you for your kind new year greeting and your family picture.

I was very happy to see you with your family on the picture.

I was sad about that I could not see you while your visit in Germany.

I am far from you but am wishing for your happiness and good health.

I am looking forward to seeing you someday."

Comments

  • roger-sroger-s

    While not perfect, the letter you are sending is fine. You only need to worry so much about being perfect if you're sending a professional letter. If you have a personal relationship with this guy, then don't worry about it.

    Here is my suggestion if you still want to improve it:

    " Dear Michael,

    Thank you for your kind New Year greeting and your family picture. I was very happy to see your family photo. I was sad I could not see you when you visited Germany. I am far from you, but wish for your happiness and good health. I look forward to seeing you someday."

    I think that is OK if you have never seen him before. If you have seen him in person before, I would change the last sentence to: "I look forward to seeing you again someday.'

    By the way, I used to live in Germany (1993-1995) and hope to return this summer to live there for several years. It is such a beautiful country.

  • lis9802lis9802

    It's a nice letter. I offer a few small suggestions.

    Dear Michael,

    Thank you for your kind New Year's greeting and your family picture.

    I was very happy to see you and your family in the photo.

    I am sad about not being able to see you when you visited Germany.

    I am far from you but I wish you happiness and good health.

    I am looking forward to seeing you someday.

  • olafolaf

    Try this

    " Dear Michael,

    Thank you for your kind New Year greetings and your family picture.

    It was good to see you together with your family in the picture.

    I was sad that I could not see you during your visit in Germany.

    I may be far from you, but wish for your happiness and good health.

    I am looking forward to seeing you someday."

    2 minutes ago - 1 week left to answer.

  • reece-chapman_60bb359c62b9freece-chapman_60bb359c62b9f

    Some bits were wrong

    Dear Michael,

    Thank you for your kind New Years greeting and your family picture.

    I was very happy to see you with your family in the picture.

    I was sad that i could not see you while you were visiting Germany.

    I am far from you but i am wishing for you happiness and good health.

    I am looking forward to seeing you someday.

  • finley-thomas_60bb359d5d00efinley-thomas_60bb359d5d00e

    Only a few mistakes, re read what I write

    " Dear Michael,

    Thank you for your kind new year greeting and your family picture.

    I was very happy to see you with your family IN the picture.

    I was sad that I could not see you while YOU VISITED in Germany.

    I am far from you but I am wishing for your happiness and good health.

    I am looking forward to seeing you someday."

  • beth-hbeth-h

    " Dear Michael,

    Thank you for your kind new year greeting and your family picture.

    I was very happy to see you with your family on the picture.

    I was sad that I could not see you while you were visiting Germany.

    I'm far from you but I'm wishing you happiness and good health.

    I'm looking forward to seeing you someday."

  • isla-campbell_60bb359e8b7b2isla-campbell_60bb359e8b7b2

    Dear Michael,

    Thank you for your kind new year greeting and your family picture.

    I was very happy to see you with your family in the picture.

    I was sad about that I could not see you while you were visiting Germany.

    I am far from you but i wish you happiness and good health.

    I am looking forward to seeing you someday

  • ella-thomas_60bb359f50ec2ella-thomas_60bb359f50ec2

    "Dear Michael,

    Thank you for your kind New Year's greeting and your family picture which I was happy to receive. It was good seeing you with them.

    I was sad that I was not able to see you during your visit to Germany.

    Even though we are far apart, I wish you and your family happiness and good health.

    I look forward to seeing you again some day."

  • peppermintpaddypeppermintpaddy

    Your grammar is good. It gets your message across clearly

    I would change:

    "I was sad about that I could not see you while your visit in Germany."

    TO:

    I was sad I could not see you while you were here in Germany.

    and:

    "I am far from you but am wishing for your happiness and good health"

    TO:

    Although we are far apart, I wish you health and happiness.

    In the English language, sometimes starting too many phrases with "I" is a little overkill. If you know what I mean.

  • holly-walsh_60bb35a1154e7holly-walsh_60bb35a1154e7

    in the picture (not on the picture).

    I was sorry that I could not see you while you were visiting Germany.

    I am a long way away from you, but I wish you happiness and good health.

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