Native English speaker : Correct grammar mistakes please?
I'm from Germany and would like to write a letter in English without any grammatical mistakes so it would be a great help if you could correct the mistakes.
The letter is here :
" Dear Michael,
Thank you for your kind new year greeting and your family picture.
I was very happy to see you with your family on the picture.
I was sad about that I could not see you while your visit in Germany.
I am far from you but am wishing for your happiness and good health.
I am looking forward to seeing you someday."
Comments
While not perfect, the letter you are sending is fine. You only need to worry so much about being perfect if you're sending a professional letter. If you have a personal relationship with this guy, then don't worry about it.
Here is my suggestion if you still want to improve it:
" Dear Michael,
Thank you for your kind New Year greeting and your family picture. I was very happy to see your family photo. I was sad I could not see you when you visited Germany. I am far from you, but wish for your happiness and good health. I look forward to seeing you someday."
I think that is OK if you have never seen him before. If you have seen him in person before, I would change the last sentence to: "I look forward to seeing you again someday.'
By the way, I used to live in Germany (1993-1995) and hope to return this summer to live there for several years. It is such a beautiful country.
It's a nice letter. I offer a few small suggestions.
Dear Michael,
Thank you for your kind New Year's greeting and your family picture.
I was very happy to see you and your family in the photo.
I am sad about not being able to see you when you visited Germany.
I am far from you but I wish you happiness and good health.
I am looking forward to seeing you someday.
Try this
" Dear Michael,
Thank you for your kind New Year greetings and your family picture.
It was good to see you together with your family in the picture.
I was sad that I could not see you during your visit in Germany.
I may be far from you, but wish for your happiness and good health.
I am looking forward to seeing you someday."
2 minutes ago - 1 week left to answer.
Some bits were wrong
Dear Michael,
Thank you for your kind New Years greeting and your family picture.
I was very happy to see you with your family in the picture.
I was sad that i could not see you while you were visiting Germany.
I am far from you but i am wishing for you happiness and good health.
I am looking forward to seeing you someday.
Only a few mistakes, re read what I write
" Dear Michael,
Thank you for your kind new year greeting and your family picture.
I was very happy to see you with your family IN the picture.
I was sad that I could not see you while YOU VISITED in Germany.
I am far from you but I am wishing for your happiness and good health.
I am looking forward to seeing you someday."
" Dear Michael,
Thank you for your kind new year greeting and your family picture.
I was very happy to see you with your family on the picture.
I was sad that I could not see you while you were visiting Germany.
I'm far from you but I'm wishing you happiness and good health.
I'm looking forward to seeing you someday."
Dear Michael,
Thank you for your kind new year greeting and your family picture.
I was very happy to see you with your family in the picture.
I was sad about that I could not see you while you were visiting Germany.
I am far from you but i wish you happiness and good health.
I am looking forward to seeing you someday
"Dear Michael,
Thank you for your kind New Year's greeting and your family picture which I was happy to receive. It was good seeing you with them.
I was sad that I was not able to see you during your visit to Germany.
Even though we are far apart, I wish you and your family happiness and good health.
I look forward to seeing you again some day."
Your grammar is good. It gets your message across clearly
I would change:
"I was sad about that I could not see you while your visit in Germany."
TO:
I was sad I could not see you while you were here in Germany.
and:
"I am far from you but am wishing for your happiness and good health"
TO:
Although we are far apart, I wish you health and happiness.
In the English language, sometimes starting too many phrases with "I" is a little overkill. If you know what I mean.
in the picture (not on the picture).
I was sorry that I could not see you while you were visiting Germany.
I am a long way away from you, but I wish you happiness and good health.