Can you critique my breaking dawn poem? (for a project)?
We have to do a project on a book and I chose Breaking Dawn. I had to write a 20 line poem and i was wondering if you could help me by editing it or just giving me suggestions on what you would do to fix it!
Here it is:
I'd always had that feeling,
that inside me greatness was brewing.
That I could be so much more,
and this life was merely a detour.
It was when I saw his sparkling beauty,
that I realized my life was empty.
I wanted his strength,
and was willing to get it at any length.
I fell in love with my hero,
I admired him from head to toe.
His speed, his touch,
I hoped one day I could be so much.
That one day came,
and I will never be the same.
My thirst is for blood,
my speed leaves one blind.
I am finally the beautiful monster,
that to become I had been so eager.
I am now to my soul true,
and to my past life I say adieu.
Thanks for anything! 
Comments
It's good! I like it.