Does my poem make sense?
One friend
Five friends
Ten friends
No, just one
We were fifteen
That was it one friend
That was all I needed to be happy
And I was more than happy
I was fifteen
But how long would I be happy
How long would I be fifteen
Joy can't come without a price
Do friends come with a price?
I didn't know I was fifteen
And now, no longer fifteen
I look back and think why did I lose a year of my life for one friend? A year of disappointed parents, of bad grade. It was because i was fifteen.
Does this make sense? I'm writing it based on William stafford "fifteen" any help in adding or removing parts. Thanks
Comments
It makes sense alright. But it sounds a bit like a children's song.
I write poetry but I'm not teacher, so I can't really help.
Yeah I like it
was a lil confused at first