please criticize my poem!!!?

actinglover

Afraid…

I have feelings of love for the girl I see.

Does she love me too, what does she think of me?

I wish I could tell her she makes me whole, but I'm afraid to say

what's deep in my soul.

I don't want to lose her, for I would be alone,

and some days I just can't wait to hear her voice on the phone.

She does certain things to make me feel loved,

some days she wants to be alone and my heart is shoved.

I want to feel as though I am her safeguard,

the one she can come to when things get hard.

I will always be there to help her along,

and before we met I wasn't as strong.

I wish I could tell her what I feel inside,

but I'm afraid of what she'll say, how she'll act on the outside.

nitemareslayer

Indeed. Just be careful to not use this on a woman who doesn't care about you, lest she buries your heart into the ground.

patches

Can't criticize your poem. It is great.

katie

i love love love your poem. very creative.

ames

that is really sweet