Do you think this sentence has problem?
My friend told me that this sentence grammatically correct, but the way that i use "dressing formally" affects the phrase "having a smile on my phrase." It makes the phrase like i was smiling at the presentation.
Do you feel this way? If yes, how do i fix this problem?
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Having a smile on my face, dressing formally, I did a great job on my presentation.
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Comments
Try this: Dressed informally, and with a smile on my face, I did a great job on my presentation.
Take out the middle section (dressing formally). Does it still make sense to you? Having a smile on my face, I did a great job on my presentation. It is okay but it needs work. How about this:
With formal dress and a smile on my face, I did a great job on my presentation.
Having a smile on my face and being formally dressed, I gave a great presentation.
Dressed formally and with a smile on my face, I did a great job on my presentation.
It may be grammatically correct, I'm not sure, but I think so. I do, however, think it's a poor sentence. It doesn't flow well, or give a clear idea of what you're wanting to say. Maybe you could say... I did a great job on my presentation. I dressed formally and had a smile on my face.
Dressed formally, with a smile on my face, I did a great job on my presentation.
How about this, "Dressing formally and having a smile on my face, I did a great job on my presentation."?
I dunno. It doesn't sound right. Try: By dressing formally and having a smile on my face, I did a great job on my presentation.
or: Because I dressed formally and kept a smile on my face, I did a great job on my presentation.
or: Keeping a smile on my face and dressing formally helped me do a great job on my presentation.
I'd change it to ...face, while dressed formally, I....
But I'm no English Major, either.
Umm..honestly everything you just said is "gramatically incorrect" you don't even have proper sentences...that sentence is the least of your worries...sorry man, but just telling it like it is!