Please read my poem "Blind"?

kelly-clark_60bdd91927c8ekelly-clark_60bdd91927c8e
in Arts & Humanities

Smile like the joker to seem not alone

While I chisel what I want on this heart of stone

But tell me what you see

Art is different between you and me

I see love you see pain

You see joy I see strain

There's no mirror to my emotions

So I'm still here wondering about my devotions

While others work at theirs

And I feel there stairs

It feels like a nightmare

Ready to wake

In those shakes

But I'm still unconscious

But still feel like I'm the only one with a conscious

Found myself caught in a low

Thought I should take it slow

But what did I know

I let my fears be outspoken

My inspiration now provoking

I guess I've finally awoken

Awoken to darkness

Wondering where the light is

Still can't see

a thing of reality

A gift kept from me

So sparks of creativity

Keep me sane

But people only worry about making it rain

But lighting wont suffice

So every second I sacrifice

For light

To be brought to this night

.....and finally get my sight

Comments

  • chrischris

    Nice poem. One spelling mistake in the 10th line, should be spelt stares not stairs. Might want to try adding stanzas to break it up a little.

    Nb. Also before stairs it should be their not there. As it is possessive.

  • dean-mitchell_60bdd91acbdd5dean-mitchell_60bdd91acbdd5

    It`s Very Nice C: I Usually HATE Poetry And Stuff Like That because I Hate Reading Nd I Think It Is Very Cheesy But No This Was Very Nice C:

  • henry-murray_60bdd91ba31f3henry-murray_60bdd91ba31f3

    Who cares about the spelling mistakes the poem was REALLY good. I don't hate poems but I never really liked them, but this was a good one that I actually liked! You have a natural talent for poetry! If you write poems again, I hope they'll be as heartwarming and moving as this one! :)

  • archie-kennedy_60bdd91c753ecarchie-kennedy_60bdd91c753ec

    And I feel there stairs should be, and I feel their stares. Also conscious should be conscience.

    Over than that you've got a natural talent

  • anonymousanonymous

    I came onto this one coz I thought this could be Entertaining.... But wow, I mean like really wow

    that was Beautiful you have a real tallent there

  • anonymousanonymous

    Um.

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