do you this poem is OK?
i wrote this at school....:::
loneliness
quietness
depression
felling hurt
wanting to die
wanting to scream
wanting to fly up high
hurting others
causing pain
slowly dieing
tears of pain
wishing to better
wishing to be free
wanting to see angels
wanting eternal love
tears of joy and tears of pain
missing the one who should be here
nightmares and horrid thoughts
wanting to be taught
taught to be better
taught to love
wanting not to feel this way
wanting not to cause pain
running away form hatred
running from the pain
pretending to be happy
when im really not
keeping all the secrets
keeping all the thoughts
keeping all this hatred
keeping all this pain
thoughts that feel like acid rain
a broken record of sham
wanting to die
wanting to scream
wanting to be loved
wanting to be held
a broken soul of sham
Update:and yes i am diagnosed with depression and no im not emo and i don't cut myself
Comments
uhm, its TERRIBLE....
i'm sorry but you seem like the kind of person that cuts themselves for enjoyment.. and i cant enjoy a poem about death.
FREAAAAAAAK.
I like it. I like depressing poems the most. You should write another poem.
It's beautiful. I love it.
I'm not just saying that.
I seriously love it.
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it's.... okay
maybe add a little more word variety and descriptive words.
yeah I love it I think it's awesome!!