A new poem I wrote today comments.?

sweetinnocencesweetinnocence
in Arts & Humanities

Dark Hatred

Tues July 28, 2009

Dark hatred is coursing

Through my veins

Never again shall I let this

Feeling pass

I feel reborn again

Because now I realize how

I really am

I’m sick of the games

That people play with me

You think I’m weak and innocent

Well my innocence burned out of me

A long time ago

I’m sick of the humiliation

I’ve been put through

All my life

I’m not your damned puppet

That you can control

And I can be manipulated

I’m sick that you don’t

Treat me right

I know the way I am

Stop reminding me of the

Curse I’ve been inflicted upon

I feel nothing for you anymore

You’re dead to me in my

Heart and mind

I thought of you as a friend

Now we don’t have that anymore

And you know what

A new side of you has

Been unveiled

Now I know how you really are

Actually I’ve been knowing

For much too long I’ve been quite about it

And I won’t take it anymore

As I turned to the mirror

And saw your face before me

I said die

And saw you shrivel before me

This is my revenge on you

So have fun in hell

And never do come back

To me ever again.

Comments

  • r-rr-r

    Do not know too much about the poetry , so if I say it looks ok, then no offence plz. further, I can see the fire you have let out through this poem. I donot want to be in a situation where I have to hear this poem written for me.

  • parisparis

    Love

  • idkidk

    Seems kinda like anger outlet.

    Ah the rage.

    Yet theres no pain.

    Did you get over it?

    Btw i don't think dreams are created by love.

    They can be created with any emotion driving it.

  • jacob-clarke_60bea1d6cf638jacob-clarke_60bea1d6cf638

    that is a cool poem good job U might even beable to get it into a poem book I do not know but mabey

  • chlochlo

    This is a really strong poem. i have very much pleasure reading this. i say you should try entering your peoms in contests i know i have but yours is greatly deep. i love it

    chloe ♥

  • pika-boopika-boo

    Got a lot of feelings. but its good to take them out on a poem. it was good.

  • couches-lt3couches-lt3

    no structure, technique, or true feeling.

    i couldn't get myself to read the whole thing

    you must be 13.

  • alexandriaalexandria

    Its good and well written, but a little to angry and personal for my taste.

  • ffx27n-mommaffx27n-momma

    Makes me think of unicorns and rainbows.

  • tissuetissue

    wow gud job

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