A new poem I wrote today comments.?
Dark Hatred
Tues July 28, 2009
Dark hatred is coursing
Through my veins
Never again shall I let this
Feeling pass
I feel reborn again
Because now I realize how
I really am
I’m sick of the games
That people play with me
You think I’m weak and innocent
Well my innocence burned out of me
A long time ago
I’m sick of the humiliation
I’ve been put through
All my life
I’m not your damned puppet
That you can control
And I can be manipulated
I’m sick that you don’t
Treat me right
I know the way I am
Stop reminding me of the
Curse I’ve been inflicted upon
I feel nothing for you anymore
You’re dead to me in my
Heart and mind
I thought of you as a friend
Now we don’t have that anymore
And you know what
A new side of you has
Been unveiled
Now I know how you really are
Actually I’ve been knowing
For much too long I’ve been quite about it
And I won’t take it anymore
As I turned to the mirror
And saw your face before me
I said die
And saw you shrivel before me
This is my revenge on you
So have fun in hell
And never do come back
To me ever again.
Comments
Do not know too much about the poetry , so if I say it looks ok, then no offence plz. further, I can see the fire you have let out through this poem. I donot want to be in a situation where I have to hear this poem written for me.
Love
Seems kinda like anger outlet.
Ah the rage.
Yet theres no pain.
Did you get over it?
Btw i don't think dreams are created by love.
They can be created with any emotion driving it.
that is a cool poem good job U might even beable to get it into a poem book I do not know but mabey
This is a really strong poem. i have very much pleasure reading this. i say you should try entering your peoms in contests i know i have but yours is greatly deep. i love it
chloe ♥
Got a lot of feelings. but its good to take them out on a poem. it was good.
no structure, technique, or true feeling.
i couldn't get myself to read the whole thing
you must be 13.
Its good and well written, but a little to angry and personal for my taste.
Makes me think of unicorns and rainbows.
wow gud job