Does My Novel Okay!!!?
When Jano Shelby was young he saw his father get gun down by the ruthless killers, The Brattle Brothers. Since then he has forsaken the hunt for his father killer becoming a one man army killing who ever gets in his way.
Meanwhile, the Brattle Brothers are working for a man known as Damon Spade who hires them to go killed an ex member who is on the run with a million dollars Hermutt Dick Speed and reachieved the money has stolen. And while this is all happening the sheriff Doc Redfeild is on the cade to kill everyone involved in this scandal.
Comments
It sounds more like a....film. The ideas sound good and I like the names given for the characters, but again it sounds like it should be written in a script style and handed over to some producers to develop upon. (If it is well written, plotted and crowd pleasing that is.)
But it could also work out as a novel. Actually, It might be a awesome novel, if you know how to pull in the crowd. Create easy to like characters whether they be bad or good. Create a world in which you envisioned but others can picture as-well.
I like how there could possibly be a branching of different stories and not too much 'drama'. I'm sure there's bound to be a lover(s), as there always is, but I think if you blend it in well with the whole killing and revenge type plot, then this novel may be on many peoples bookshelves in the future. If you wish to share it out.
That's my opinion, Leep
Sounds good but you should make sure you have a strong plot plan and know where you're going, and as the other said, make sure your characters are well rounded. If you want to write then you should write, it's not up to other people to make that decision for you!
As long as you put effort into the character development of Jano then yeah, I'd read it.
It's not my cup of tea but it sounds like it would make a great movie! You know write whatever you feel and someone out there is bound to LOVE it! Just be true to your voice