Weird poem......?
Ok ppl I just wrote this its kind of weird plz tell me what you think good or bad
Can the truth be a lie?
Can chaos be the only order?
You are my disease.
Your broken spirit is my addiction.
I’m drowning and I’m taking you with me.
If I’m alive it’s only to hurt you.
My pain runs in your veins.
Can you taste my sickness?
Every candle you burn I breath fear in you.
I love you but I hate you so much.
I’m torn away from every thing I love.
You can’t see how sorry I am … forgive me.
Run away from me and free your self.
Release me and all that I have done wrong.
Nothing left for me here except your love.
Leve me… I want to die alone.
Save your self… thank me when I’m gone.
You will never belong to me again.
I love you.
Comments
I like it ~ and I wouldn't call it weird.
In fact, I can see that as a good song lyric {sounds rather like the style of Type O Negative}
maximum of all, i'd like a poem to make experience. If a poem basically is clever to the poet then they haven't any employer displaying it to human beings. i do unlike being perplexed and that i'm particular human beings do not the two.
Weird is right; yet, has a strange beauty to it; but an awful lot of self-hatred. I would not want be her/you.
Alberich
I like the meaning and the wording. I don't think it's weird at all I think it's deep.
on a scale of 1-10, i give you a 5.5
It's weird. Not bad. Doesn't really belong in poetry though.
To me its sad but very good
thats awesome
but kind of contradictory in a way...
I like it.
Keep it up!