Is this poem good enough?

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• pandora-

  May 2021

  I have made minor alterations to this interesting poem,

  but it does need a lot more editing, especially the end part.

  Cry, cry all you want

  I don't want to see salty tears

  burning through the mahogany table like droplet holes.

  I don't want your dry lips pressing against mines as they will crack,

  your excuses for ripping my heart out with a silver spoon.

  and definitely don't want the necklace I gave you full of fleas.

  I want you gone, gone from this castle!................

  "Drip, drip, drip, drip"......

  I stared hard out the window.

  Is it my fault she had to be such a ****.

  Her dripping boots treading across

  the moody landscape, a sign of failure.

  Let her rot on the trenches of spears.

  I died for you whore, you stank whore

  I died, I died , I died for you!!!......

  "Honey wake up"...

  "oh my dear, I had a terrible nightmare"

  " I saw you staring at the window and

  thought you saw a ghost of some sort".

  "You were deathly pale".

  "Oh, I was, It must have been my reflection.