Do these two sentences make sense?
Do these sentences make sense?? Just trying to edit something telling a little bit about myself for a school project.. thanks!
"I'm no where close to perfect and make plenty of mistakes, but I'm lucky enough to be surrounded by people who love me enough to forgive me for all of my imperfections and move on. I try not to stress too much over the small stuff -- just learn from it and better myself in any way I can."
Update:ohh okay. i'm still trying to decide if i should keep it since i'm going into the 8th grade.. i don't want to sound like a know it all. ha.
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I have made some small suggestions in the text. I hope they are helpful.
"I'm nowhere close to perfect and I make plenty of mistakes; but I'm lucky to be surrounded by people who love me enough to forgive my many imperfections and move on. I try not to stress about the small stuff -- just learn from it and better myself in any way I can."
You have a writer's voice, your words mostly flow. You can see the changes I have made, but do you understand why? Using to and too and enough twice in one sentence may confuse some readers. Adding I to your first sentence gave the thought balance.
I removed some phrases and incidental words that did not add information because they tend to slow your prose down.
Keep writing! You have a marvelous capability for clarity of expression.
It should be: "I'm no where close to perfect and I make plenty of mistakes, but I'm lucky to be surrounded by people who love me enough to forgive me for all of my imperfections and move on. I try not to stress too much over the small things -- I just learn from it and try to be better in myself in any way I can".
Good sentences though -they're really meaningful.
merely approximately good... a million) Afterwards, blend the eggs, glass of milk, and the pepper in the sluggish cooker. 2) Despues, se revuelven los huevos , el vaso* de leche y la pimienta en la olla de cocimiento lento. Then: a million) set the sluggish cooker on low putting. 2) Encienda la olla de cocimiento y pongala en temperatura baja. *glass is vaso in Spanish, no longer cup. that is "taza"
They're okay. Built on a strong foundation.
Sounds good.
Yea its great youll do fine have fun
"Nowhere." One word.