How to speak to a restaurant manager?
Hi,
I was hoping you could help me re-phrase this paragraph for me?
'Hello I am a student and i am currently studying catering at college, the college requires me to look for a job within the catering industry, i was wondering if you have anything available. Im not looking for a head chef position but to perhaps be part of the team, i have a huge passion for food and hospitality but im finding it hard to find employment and i need to start somewhere right? perhaps a weekend postion? I'd love to work in your restaurant i have been a few times and thoroughly enjoyed it, so is there anyway we could discuss this further'
Im not so sure how that sounds but i really want the manager to give me a job, or consider a position so i want to really engage him in, maybe helpe me sound more persuasive?
Thanks!!!
Comments
Sounds pretty good to me. Leave out the "hello". The letter should be addressed to the manager by name (Dear Mr. Smith) if at all possible.
You might also delete "I am a student and ". If you are studying catering at college, it's obvious you are a student. That first sentence should be 3 separate sentences. Use periods instead of commas. You pretty much need to replace all your commas with periods.
You might change the last sentence from "so it there anyway we could discuss this further" to something like "I would love to meet with you to discuss this further." Give contact info and maybe even times you are available to meet -- ie, available Monday and Wednesday mornings and Tuesday and Thursday after 1pm.